Peter lee
2013/4/13
Journal
Topic 16: my exposition
Peter and Mike was walking on a street and looking for
eat. They saw a restaurant call NEAT. They go in to the NEAT and sit down the
seat to eat the things. Inside the restaurant NEAT, there is a cool music which
is very fashion. It is one of the famous groups of the hip pop. The music sound
rock and cool. Peter buys a Hansberger and Mike buys a cheese burger. Our food tastes
like a heaven and smells really good. The Hansberger looks like a huge ball.
and it touch like a bread. All the spices were inside the burger. Mike think
mines burger is better than his burger so he want to trade the burger from me. My
answer of the question is no but he really wants the burger so he tries to buy
a new burger from the restaurant. They said there are no that kind of the
burgers anymore. The entire Hansberger got sell. He really wants it so he challenges
me. We had had a treaty. Who wins the paper scissor rock can choose the Hansberger
first and who lose the paper scissor rock will need to pay the lunch. At the
end, I win the game.
It seems you really don't want to give your burger, you use a lot of description and a lot of visional description to describe the food, the NEAT restaurant, and the music play in the house, which is very good, because it gives more information for the reader to find out what the surrounding in the scene look like. Not a bad effort.
ReplyDeleteits a cute story, and paper scissor stone is always a good way to solve the problem when each other want to get the same of the things, and you make me wanna taste that burger,i guess the burger is too awesome, so you two were arguing bout this.
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